Issue 2 - Page 7

5th Feb 2016, 7:22 PM in Birthright - Part 2
Issue 2 - Page 7
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Steven-Vincent 5th Feb 2016, 7:22 PM edit delete
Steven-Vincent
Now we are finally getting to it. From this point on is the first scene I wrote for this comic. I revised it heavily, changed it, changed it again after layouts and again after that... but I think it has come out mostly the way I wanted.

Toughest part was finding different positions and motions for Liberty Man, since he is confined to the bed.
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revzet 5th Feb 2016, 7:27 PM edit delete reply
revzet
MURICA

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lirvilas 5th Feb 2016, 7:48 PM edit delete reply
lirvilas
Take this for what you will, but this page compelled me to subscribe.

There's something about Doctor Manhattan and Captain America and the Comedian (and these two) that strikes me as a hell of a lot more *real* than the usual "...protecting the city they love by the cover of night" hooha that persists in capes and tights comics.

Anyways, (shot in the dark) say hello to all the grunts getting their degrees at Fort Bragg... :)
Steven-Vincent 5th Feb 2016, 8:48 PM edit delete reply
Steven-Vincent
Not sure what you mean about the Fort Bragg thing...

I'm glad you liked the page. LL is a Bronze Age style comic and back then (ca. 1979) the patriotic type characters were very popular. LL is patterned on that style... although as a teenager she is probably more idealistic than the 'grown ups' even back then.
Centcomm 5th Feb 2016, 7:52 PM edit delete reply
Centcomm
Best page ever. I really like the dialogue here . Well done
Steven-Vincent 5th Feb 2016, 8:49 PM edit delete reply
Steven-Vincent
Thanks, Cent.

This is like the 5th draft of that dialogue. It was wordier but I cut some out. Glad it came across the way I had hoped (for you at least).
Haegan2005 6th Feb 2016, 2:16 AM edit delete reply
Haegan2005
This is simply well done. Facial expressions, body language, dialog, bravo!
Steven-Vincent 6th Feb 2016, 8:54 AM edit delete reply
Steven-Vincent
Thanks. In many ways a dialogue scene like this (and it has a few pages to go) can be more difficult than an action scene.

I had tons of trouble with the lighting because I was still new to Iray, and had not figured out things like, you can change the simulated f/stop or ISO and easily alter brightness without touching the light emitters themselves. I'm glad that in the finished product this struggle is not evident.
Comic Fan 6th Feb 2016, 10:50 PM edit delete reply
My favorite panel is the very last one on this page. The young lady looks like she just grew up about 7 years. Appropriate given all that's happened to her in the last day or three and in light of the current exchange.

I'm very happy that you've decided to go with Iray. Well done.
Steven-Vincent 7th Feb 2016, 12:04 AM edit delete reply
Steven-Vincent
Thanks.

The Iray stuff looks even better in Issue 3, now that I know a little more what I am doing with it. I was flying blind back last summer doing this, since Iray had only come out at the end of May.

And yes, Abby is going to have to do some growing up in these next few weeks of her life, as she comes to grips with what has happened to her.
syddent 11th Feb 2016, 1:19 PM edit delete reply
The dialog was snappy and fun. I enjoyed her final response.
You did a fantastic job on her expression on the last panel.
Steven-Vincent 11th Feb 2016, 7:34 PM edit delete reply
Steven-Vincent
Glad you liked it. Abby is a super-patriotic character so these kinds of responses are typical of her. Hopefully I did as good a job on the rest of the dialogue and you will continue to enjoy it. :)
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